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The graph represents the levels of production for primary fuels in a European nation from the year 1981 to 2000.

The graph represents the levels of production for primary fuels in a European nation from the year 1981 to 2000.
The presented graph illustrates the manufacturing ranks of principal gasoline in a European nation between 1981 and 2000, during a 19-year period. It is evident that
Petroleum
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 always headed the list of production levels.
While
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Petroleum
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 and coal pursued an erratic pattern, Natural gas went without change for most of the period.
To begin
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 with, in 1981,
Petroleum
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 accounted for approximately 100
tonnes
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 outdoing the creation of coal and natural gas. From 1981 to 1987, the data for
Petroleum
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 increased slightly by 40
tonnes
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 and remained stable for 5 years. The figure for
Petroleum
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 shrunk to 90
tonnes
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 in 1991. During a period of 9 years from 1991 to 2000, there was a modest jump in
Petroleum
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 from 90
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 to 120
tonnes
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.
On the other hand
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, the statistics
of
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on
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 natural gas remained unchanged at 40
tonnes
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 from 1981 to 1994. Between 1994 and 2000, the number of coal ballooned to 83
tonnes
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 in 2000. At the same time, coal production
leveled
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 off at 80
tonnes
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.
Finally
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,
this
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 trend jumped back and forth erratically from 1987 to 2000.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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