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the diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the development plan of
central
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the central
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library
 from 20 years ago and
today
.
Overall
, the
center
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centre
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 of
library
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the library
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today
 has many
changed
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 compared to how the
center
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centre
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 of
library
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the library
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 looks in 20 years ago.
Furthermore
, the
center
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centre
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 of
library
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the library
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today
 is more well-structured than in the past.
In
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On
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 the left side of the maps,
in
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apply
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20 years ago, there were CDs, videos, and computer games
room
,
reading
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a reading
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room
, and space for
collection
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a collection
the collection
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 of adult fiction
books
is
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situated between those rooms. Now,
CDs
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the CDs
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, videos and computer games
room
 has changed into
children's
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a children's
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 fiction
books
room
. The
room
 is
also
 decorated with two sofas and can
be use
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to
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for
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 storytelling events. Since
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and magazines now is rare to exist, a reading
room
 has changed into
the
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a
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 computer
room
 now and for space between those rooms
have
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has
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 changed into space for all reference
books
.
In
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On
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 the right side of the maps, a children's
boook
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book
room
 now has changed into
lecture
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a lecture
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room
, and
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk that usually people use for tickets and book returns has changed into
cafe
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the cafe
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.
However
, between
cafe
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the cafe
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 and
lecture
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the lecture
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room
, there are self-service machines,
information
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an information
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 desk, and
collection
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a collection
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 of adult fiction
books
. More than that,
today
, there
is
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are
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 no tables and chairs anymore in the middle of the
library
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, today, room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 6 times.
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