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the graph below shows the number of university graduatesin canada from 1992 to 2007

the graph below shows the number of university graduatesin canada from 1992 to 2007
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The line chart illustrates the
amount
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 of graduates from Canadian universities in
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years
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the years
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 between 1992 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen there is a similar gradual upward trend for both females and males.
However
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, there is a
consistent
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 large gap between the amount of women and men over the course of the
years
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.
To begin
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 with, there is an incline for the first two
years
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, which achieved an estimate of 105,000 women and 75,000 men. For the next two
years
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, there is a slight decrease, reaching back to its starting points, which are around 100,000 and 70,000 for females and males respectively. After that, it continues growing for both trends, excluding the small rise and fall for the boys in the range of 2000 and 2002.
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, both reached a peak in 2007, in which there are about 150,000 for girls,
while
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 there are about 100,000 for boys.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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