two maps below show an island before ans after the construction of some tourist facilities.

two maps below show an island before ans after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Two maps illustrate before and after the
facilites
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facilities
development of an island.
Overall
, it is obvious that before the
construction
began, there
is
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were
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no facilities to use at all, after the
construction
, there
are
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were
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more
restaurant
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restaurants
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and
accomodation
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accommodation
. It can be seen that some trees are staying in the same place without being
cut-down
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, except a tree that
surrounded
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by other trees. After the establishment, new facilities
such
as a restaurant and reception have been built. There are many
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of accomodation
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accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
that
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apply
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located
in
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on
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both sides
besides
the restaurant and reception.
In addition
, there is
footpath
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a footpath
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near the houses
while
there is a vehicle track to ride to the facilities
However
, one of the most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
changes is the pier between two boats which is located outside. Behind
this
island, there is a beach where before the
construction
people were not allowed to go swimming but after the
construction
, people can go swimming.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words construction with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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