two maps below show an island before ans after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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Two maps illustrate before and after the

facilites

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facilities

development of an island.

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, it is obvious that before the

construction

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began, there

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were

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no facilities to use at all, after the

construction

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, there

are

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were

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restaurant

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restaurants

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and

accomodation

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accommodation

. It can be seen that some trees are staying in the same place without being

cut-down

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cut down

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, except a tree that

surrounded

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is surrounded

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by other trees. After the establishment, new facilities

such

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as a restaurant and reception have been built. There are many

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of accomodation

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accomodation

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accommodation

accommodations

that

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apply

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located

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both sides

besides

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the restaurant and reception.

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, there is

footpath

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a footpath

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near the houses

while

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there is a vehicle track to ride to the facilities

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, one of the most

noticable

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noticeable

notable

changes is the pier between two boats which is located outside. Behind

this

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island, there is a beach where before the

construction

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people were not allowed to go swimming but after the

construction

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, people can go swimming.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words construction with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

152 words

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two maps below show an island before ans after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people say that we have developed into a “throw-away” culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem ?

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?