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Some people think the best way to solve trafic congestion in cities is to provide free public transport 24 hour a day, 7 days a week. Is it good or bad, to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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task achievement
Your essay does not adhere to the IELTS task 2 essay format. You should present a clear introduction that paraphrases the question and outlines your position, followed by body paragraphs that support your view with relevant examples or explanations, and the essay should be concluded with a summary of your main points and restatement of your position.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks logical structure and the coherence needed for an IELTS task 2 response. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to introduce the central idea, and ensure that the subsequent sentences elaborate on that idea in a logical sequence.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to include an introduction and a conclusion. The introduction should set the stage for your argument, while the conclusion should succinctly summarize the key points made within the body, and reaffirm your stance on the topic.
task achievement
Be sure to address the task directly, with relevant arguments and clear explanations. You need to take a position (agree or disagree) on the given statement about providing free public transport to solve traffic congestion and support your viewpoint throughout the essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • financial implications
  • environmental sustainability
  • social equity
  • infrastructure
  • ridership
  • commuting behavior
  • congestion pricing
  • alternative transportation
  • urban planning
  • feasible
  • subsidize
  • urban sprawl
  • rush hour
  • carbon footprint
  • socio-economic factors
  • multimodal transport solutions
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