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today the high sales of popular consumer good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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3.Strong competencies
on
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in
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 communication,negotiation,
liaison
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and liaison
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.Experiential support for dialogue with member states, improvement for bilateral partnership relations between department/sectors group and
ADB
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 departments,
as well as
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 between
ADB
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 and external relevant counterparts or institutions, and financial and intellectual support resources/channels. At MOF and
ADB
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, I witnessed and participated in the organization of 26 current institutional multilateral and bilateral
dialogues
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dialogue
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 mechanisms. In the past multilateral and bilateral dialogues conducted by MOF, some achievements are related to the formulation of strategies and road maps for many fields
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development
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of development
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. I understand the importance of relationships during my coordination and
cooperation
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 with internal and external
cooperation
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 resources and partners in the past, I gained unique skills for smooth
cooperation
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. I accumulated rich
cooperation
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 and coordination
experience
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 and made a lot of friends in related countries, donors, agencies, and departments within
ADB
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. Whether at PRC MOF or
ADB
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, I have conducted in-depth
cooperation
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 with related DMCs,clients,academia, financial institutions,
development
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 agencies, non-governmental organizations, think tanks, philanthropic institutions in some
of
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member countries,
ADB
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’s trust funds, and some entities in China. I established closer cooperative relationships and mutual trust with related dialogues counterparts, and
cooperation
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 partners for
projects
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project
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 implementation.
In particular
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, during the period of supporting TAs, I established cooperative relations with the
Development
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 Research Center of the State Council, the Chinese Academy of Sciences, relevant agencies of provinces in China,
Universities
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, reviewed relevant contents, outputs and activities, evaluated the possibility of success of the project, and contributed our knowledge to the
ADB
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 projects. 4.Promotion for
the
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team
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 building, talent
development
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, and new ideas and valuable related
experience
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 for the emergency response of
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team
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the team
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. I have been very familiar with various management policies and processes. With my rich administrative
experience
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, especially advanced human resource management concepts, methods, I can contribute groundbreaking efforts and support to
team
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 building, and establish
institutional
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an institutional
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 basis for talent cultivation, and
improving
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overall
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 operational efficiency. At the same time, I understand how to unite,encourage,
mobilize
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team
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 members, and have a profound understanding and unique approaches to stimulating the cohesion, creativity, and
work
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 passion of relevant teams. Perhaps
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 may infuse dynamism and creativity
to
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 the
team
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. I
also
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 dealt with a large number of emergency and thorny issues, events and problems, forming my own unique
work
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 approaches and styles. 5. Unique predictive thinking and forward-looking awareness. The ability is effective in avoiding blindness that contradicts objective reality, making
work
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 decisions and plans more in line with the pace of the times, reducing
work
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 errors, improving
work
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 efficiency, and improving
work
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 quality.
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 my years of
work
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experience
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 and extensive practical
experience
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 in various fields. I really pay high attention to
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 opportunity. I sincerely hope to share more with you, so that my skills and
experience
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 can bring more value to your
team
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 and become your
team
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's asset. I look forward to meeting with you and discussing my qualifications in more
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structure
The text lacks a clear structure, such as a beginning, development, and conclusion, specific to the IELTS task's requirements. To improve, organize the content into a structured format that includes an introduction that paraphrases the question, a few body paragraphs that expand on the ideas and provide examples, and a concluding paragraph that summarizes the points made.
coherence
There is no clear progression of ideas. Paragraphs and sentences are not always logically connected, which can confuse the reader. To enhance coherence, use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. Also, each paragraph should focus on a single main idea.
task response
The text deviates from the IELTS topic given, and there is a lack of focus on the topic of how the high sales of consumer goods reflect advertising power versus society's real needs. Ensure that the content is directly addressing the question posed and stays on topic throughout the response.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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