today the high sales of popular consumer good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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3.Strong competencies
on
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communication,negotiation,
liaison
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.Experiential support for dialogue with member states, improvement for bilateral partnership relations between department/sectors group and
ADB
departments,
as well as
between
ADB
and external relevant counterparts or institutions, and financial and intellectual support resources/channels. At MOF and
ADB
, I witnessed and participated in the organization of 26 current institutional multilateral and bilateral
dialogues
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mechanisms. In the past multilateral and bilateral dialogues conducted by MOF, some achievements are related to the formulation of strategies and road maps for many fields
development
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. I understand the importance of relationships during my coordination and
cooperation
with internal and external
cooperation
resources and partners in the past, I gained unique skills for smooth
cooperation
. I accumulated rich
cooperation
and coordination
experience
,
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and made a lot of friends in related countries, donors, agencies, and departments within
ADB
. Whether at PRC MOF or
ADB
, I have conducted in-depth
cooperation
with related DMCs,clients,academia, financial institutions,
development
agencies, non-governmental organizations, think tanks, philanthropic institutions in some
of
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member countries,
ADB
’s trust funds, and some entities in China. I established closer cooperative relationships and mutual trust with related dialogues counterparts, and
cooperation
partners for
projects
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implementation.
In particular
, during the period of supporting TAs, I established cooperative relations with the
Development
Research Center of the State Council, the Chinese Academy of Sciences, relevant agencies of provinces in China,
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, reviewed relevant contents, outputs and activities, evaluated the possibility of success of the project, and contributed our knowledge to the
ADB
projects. 4.Promotion for
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team
building, talent
development
, and new ideas and valuable related
experience
for the emergency response of
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. I have been very familiar with various management policies and processes. With my rich administrative
experience
, especially advanced human resource management concepts, methods, I can contribute groundbreaking efforts and support to
team
building, and establish
institutional
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basis for talent cultivation, and
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overall
operational efficiency. At the same time, I understand how to unite,encourage,
mobilize
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team
members, and have a profound understanding and unique approaches to stimulating the cohesion, creativity, and
work
passion of relevant teams. Perhaps
this
may infuse dynamism and creativity
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the
team
. I
also
dealt with a large number of emergency and thorny issues, events and problems, forming my own unique
work
approaches and styles. 5. Unique predictive thinking and forward-looking awareness. The ability is effective in avoiding blindness that contradicts objective reality, making
work
decisions and plans more in line with the pace of the times, reducing
work
errors, improving
work
efficiency, and improving
work
quality.
This
is
due to
my years of
work
experience
and extensive practical
experience
in various fields. I really pay high attention to
this
opportunity. I sincerely hope to share more with you, so that my skills and
experience
can bring more value to your
team
and become your
team
's asset. I look forward to meeting with you and discussing my qualifications in more
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task response
The text deviates from the IELTS topic given, and there is a lack of focus on the topic of how the high sales of consumer goods reflect advertising power versus society's real needs. Ensure that the content is directly addressing the question posed and stays on topic throughout the response.

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