The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are two
pie
charts provided. The first
pie
chart provides details about the
energy
usage needed by most Australian households, and the second
pie
chart illustrates the
greenhouse
gas
emissions
produced from the
energy
usage.
Overall
, heating is one sector that needs the most
energy
,
while
water
heating is the sector that makes the most
greenhouse
gas
emissions
. In decreasing order, the six main
energy
usages are heating,
water
heating, other appliances, refrigeration, lighting, and cooling.
Furthermore
, the two largest of these are heating and
water
heating, which are about 42% and 30%, respectively. The other sectors are all worth significantly less, with other appliances at around 15% and the other three, refrigeration, lighting, and cooling are contributing less than 10%.
On the other hand
,
the
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greenhouse
gas
emissions
are mainly produced from the
water
heating sector, which accounts for around 32%.
Then
, the next largest
emissions
come from other appliances, heating, and refrigeration at 28%, 15%, and 14% respectively.
Overall
, it can be seen from the second
pie
chart, that the sectors which produce the least
greenhouse
gas
emissions
are lighting and cooling which are all below 10%.
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