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The table below gives information about rail transport in four contries in 2007.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four contries in 2007.
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The presented table shows the data
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 transportation by train in Malaysia,
Canada
,
China
, and UAE in 2007. Generally, the figure highlights that among other countries, the railway transportation in
Canada
 brought more cargos than passengers, which aligns with the country having had the fewest
citizen
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citizens
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 with
train
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trains
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 for their choice of commute.
To begin
 with,
according to
 the amount of
citizen
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citizens
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 that used trains as their choice of travel,
Canada
 had the least number.
In contrast
,
China
 held the first place with the most folks travelling by train compared to the other countries.
Furthermore
, it can be noticed that there was a significant gap between the bottommost country,
Canada
, and
China
 as the leading one. For that reason,
Canada
also
 had the fewest amount of passenger kilometres per head of population,
whereas
China
 maintained its peak position.
Although
China
 has always had the
higher
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 statistics compared to
Canada
, it was reversed when it comes to the figure of cargos carried by trains.
In contrast
 with the previous categories,
Canada
 carried more
cargos
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cargo
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 than
China
.
However
, the difference between the numbers is not as notable as the prior categories.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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