Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The pie chart shows information on

car

and

transports

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use in

Edmonton

Overall

Car

and Light Rail Transit are overweight both Bus and Taxi. A great percentage of people prefer to use their

car

to commute to work rather than shopping and leisure activities.

Car

at 45% was noticeably popular among the citizens in

Edmonton

Nevertheless

, Light Rail Transit at 35% was considered favour among a great number of

population

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Edmonton

too,

although

not significantly. Bus and Taxi were the least popular

amoung

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among

the inhabitants of

Edmonton

. In

comparisons

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, these two features were only one

forth

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size of both

Car

and LRT. In spite of that, the

paercentages

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percentages

percentage

of not only Bus but

also

Taxi

were

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at 10%.

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, the highest percentage of people were using

car

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a car

the car

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to commute to work. In spite of

that

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a very small amount of citizens were using

car

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cars

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for

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shopping and leisure activities. From my

perspectives

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, the percentages of taking

hrildren

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children

to school and business were

witnessly

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witness

witnessed

witnessing

roughly

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40% to 45%.

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Task Achievement

Ensure that you fully understand and address the IELTS task prompt; the essay provided seems to be off-topic and does not address the given prompt regarding nuclear power, leading to a low score in task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion

Develop a clear and appropriate structure for your essay: introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The essay should logically organize the argument or discussion in a way that's easy to follow for the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion

Support main points with examples or explanations. While some attempts at describing the data are present, there are no clear examples or detailed explanations to support the points made regarding car and transport use.

Language proficiency

Be careful with spelling, punctuation, and grammatical structures to maintain academic writing standards and ensure your writing is easily understandable.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use paragraphs effectively, each with a clear main idea and all subsequent sentences linked to this main idea.

Coherence and Cohesion

Connect your ideas with appropriate cohesive devices (linking words), but be sure not to overuse them or use them incorrectly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

171 words

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Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviours. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discurss both these views and give your own opinion.

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