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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
number
 of Southland's main exports from 2000 and
future
Correct article usage
the future
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 plan for 2025, There are three main exports,
included
Wrong verb form
including
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 international tourism, Dairy
products
 and meat
products
. The noticeable
one
 is
number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of International
tourism
Replace the word
tourists
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, from 2000, it received more than 8
billion
 and started to increase gradually in the middle years after. They think that it can
rising
Change the verb form
rise
be rising
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 more quickly and get approximately 10
billion
 in 2025.
Next,
let’s have a look
on
Change preposition
at
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 Dairy
products
.
On
Change preposition
In
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 the first period time, it got about 7
billion
. But, it started to go up dramatically to about 10
billion
 in the middle years and will have a little change in 2025. The Meat
products
is
Change the verb form
are
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 the
one
Correct pronoun usage
ones
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who
Correct pronoun usage
that
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 have the least
number
. It got 6
billion
 in 2000 and
go
Wrong verb form
went
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 down steadily
at
Change preposition
in
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 the years after. They think it will still level down in 2025.
Overall
, Southland’s main exports
has
Verb problem
are
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 International tourism is the highest
one
, the second
one
 is dairy
products
 and the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
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number
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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Meat
product
Fix the agreement mistake
products
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, products, one, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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