Some people claim that it is justifiable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is unethical. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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it is justifiable to use
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in medical
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been around for many years, yet still
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been a subject
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for many centuries. With the establishment of human rights
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across the world, it's getting more difficult to justify
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as it contradicts the principle of human rights. Concern regarding
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of
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is the main reason since
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method to
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, there is no
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thing as 'animal rights' established and
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globalize yet. There are several
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,
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as mammals, share the typical body
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human
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does
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. These
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often be used as the experiment subject in medical
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, even if the main purpose of the experiment product is for
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in the end. Given
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condition, many
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around the world would rather choose
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for their
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subjects.
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, there are several opposing
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that
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being unjust towards
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animals
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on
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matter, generally spoken up by animal
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activists
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or
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organizations
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such
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as PETA. Given the practicality of
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, I personally agree with
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method. Using
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in medical
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is considerably more practical. No
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consent written under certain paperwork
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, even no compensation
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too
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. Utilizing
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is relatively more affordable for scientific purpose
experiment
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,
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, making
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scientific
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more agile.
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, I agree that
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should be treated equally
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other living creatures on
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earth. They don't deserve to get tortured during the
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. To continue
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practice, it must be ensured that any scientific activities involving
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are
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. In some cases in the past, there
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been moments when
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tortured, to some extent,
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and are
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are
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massacred, for
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scientific purpose. That's why it is highly important to set
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to execute
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scientific practice involving
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to prevent
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to
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once more. To safely guard
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policy, it needs to be governed and governed by
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an entity
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that deals with animal protection activism.
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Introduction and conclusion
It is important to ensure you provide a clear introduction with an overview of the topics that will be discussed, and a brief statement of your opinion. Additionally, the conclusion should succinctly summarize the main points of the essay and restate your position.
Supporting examples
Your essay lacks specific examples to support your arguments. Incorporate relevant examples from real-life situations, scientific research, or studies to reinforce your points and to meet the task requirements more effectively.
Logical structure
The structure of your essay could be improved by organizing your ideas more logically, with clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph, followed by explanations and examples that support the main idea. This will enhance the coherence and cohesion of your text.
Clear and comprehensive ideas
While you have covered the task sufficiently by discussing both views and giving your opinion, there is substantial room for improvement. Provide a more comprehensive exploration of the topic by clearly explaining why people hold these views and expanding on your own opinion with more detailed reasoning.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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