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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.
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There are two tables that illustrate the amount of
students
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 who did exchange from universities in Europe to
Australia
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 and
Australian
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students
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 who came to Universities in Europe between 2007 and 2009.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
France
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 is the country with the highest number of
students
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 who switched to study in
Australia
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,
as well as
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 the most beloved country for
Australian
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students
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 to do the same thing.
To begin
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 with, in 2007, 61
students
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 from
France
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 dominated the number of
students
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 who went to
Australia
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, followed by Sweden, the United Kingdom, and the Netherlands,
while
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 Germany only sent 27 of their
students
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 to
Australia
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. Meanwhile, in 2009, there were significantly increasing numbers for Germany and Sweden, and a decreasing amount for the United Kingdom and
France
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.
However
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,
France
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 still holds the bold position for the total number of
students
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 they sent to
Australia
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, which is 121. On the other side, in the same year, 2007,
Australian
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students
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 chose to spread to different countries like
France
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, Sweden, the United Kingdom, and the Netherlands with a similar proportion with only 18
students
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 going to Germany.
In addition
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, in 2009, the count of
Australian
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students
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 who came to
France
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 rose to 58,
while
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 other countries faced a decrease.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, australia, australian, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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