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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.
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There are two tables that illustrate the amount of
students
 who did exchange from universities in Europe to
Australia
 and
Australian
students
 who came to Universities in Europe between 2007 and 2009.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that
France
 is the country with the highest number of
students
 who switched to study in
Australia
,
as well as
 the most beloved country for
Australian
students
 to do the same thing.
To begin
 with, in 2007, 61
students
 from
France
 dominated the number of
students
 who went to
Australia
, followed by Sweden, the United Kingdom, and the Netherlands,
while
 Germany only sent 27 of their
students
 to
Australia
. Meanwhile, in 2009, there were significantly increasing numbers for Germany and Sweden, and a decreasing amount for the United Kingdom and
France
.
However
,
France
 still holds the bold position for the total number of
students
 they sent to
Australia
, which is 121. On the other side, in the same year, 2007,
Australian
students
 chose to spread to different countries like
France
, Sweden, the United Kingdom, and the Netherlands with a similar proportion with only 18
students
 going to Germany.
In addition
, in 2009, the count of
Australian
students
 who came to
France
 rose to 58,
while
 other countries faced a decrease.
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