Art is a skill and a talent and so it should not be taught at universities. Do you agree or disagree?

Well-known painters
such
as Picasso and Leonardo Da Vinci
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the same commonality, both of them learning art by themselves and not from formal education.
Therefore
, high-level education institutions are not supposed to teach art
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their class because it is an inherent human ability.
This
essay agrees with that statement because there is
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important
skill
that needs to be
taugh
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taught
tough
at colleges.
Industrial
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revolution
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on
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The UK in the 18th century
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ignited by the invention of
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engine by James Watt.
Steam
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engine is
very
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complex machine, thereforeJ ames Watt spent more than a decade at the University of Glasgow
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mechanical engineering to build it.
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example
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that
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in engineering
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more important and should be taught at the university because
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skill
could revolutionize our society. Financial management is
also
important to teach at
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education because you cannot simply learn it by yourself.
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skill
is
very
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necessary
skill
to master because nowadays many people are spent their money
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carelessly
.
For instance
, many people in Indonesia have so much debt because
the
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spent
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a lot of money buying fancy things.
Therefore
, financial management should taught at the college level to prevent
this
.
To conclude
, engineering and financial management are the
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that every
universities
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should teach because they are more important compared to the arts.
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Make sure your introduction clearly introduces the topic and your position on it. The essay should respond directly to the question by acknowledging the argument that art should or should not be taught at universities due to it being a skill and talent. Be sure to include a clear thesis statement.
task achievement
Develop your main body paragraphs with clear topic sentences that relate directly to your thesis. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Provide clear reasons or evidence to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to create clearer connections between your ideas. This helps the reader follow your arguments more easily.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion should summarise the main points and restate your position clearly, ensuring it aligns with the arguments you've made throughout the essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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