Some people think it is a better way to leave their own country to improve their work and living opportunities, while others think that staying in their own country is better choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
todays
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world , everyone
driven
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for
the
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apply
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better
opportunities
and
better
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a better
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lifestyle . Some
people
state that moving abroad gives them more
opportunities
in
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work and
improve
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their living
standard
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standards
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.
However
, others believe that there is no need to move somewhere else to make their
life
better . I will discuss both views in
this
essay and give my opinion in the end.
Primarly
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Primarily
, there is no doubt that moving to another
country
provides
better
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a better
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salary even with
less qualification
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fewer qualifications
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and makes
life
better.
For instance
, most
of
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farmers from
india
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India
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moving
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to
canada
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Canada
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because of better pay
rate
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rates
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and
provide
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finacial
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financial
support to
the
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family
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families
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.
Thus
,
people
without any high
qualification
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qualifications
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getting
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good
raise
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and afford
better
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quality
life
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of life
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by providing
finacial
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financial
support to family.
Therefore
,
this
proves that moving to another nation
also
comes with good
opportunities
.
Other
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side of folks
also
believe
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that
people
could
develope
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develop
better
life
in their own
country
with good
opportunities
.
For example
,
people
who
born
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in their own
country
has
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the golden opportunity to utilize the
finacial
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financial
support from their parents and
has
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strong references from their
realitives
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relatives
or friends which help them to find
right
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direction towards their career and make it easy for them .
Thus
,
instead
of finding
opportunities
in
strange
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world ,
its
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best for
people
to find better jobs here which improve their lifestyle. In conclusion ,
i
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believe that if
person
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use
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the sources and references and
put
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into
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them into
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real
life
then
you do
no
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not
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need to move to another
country
to make your
life
better .
Therefore
,
i
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would
definately
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definitely
recommend
people
have the privilege of knowledge about the place they
known
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know
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and
connections
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the connections
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they have which help in their job
as well as
in their lifestyle.
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