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The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some argue that the spread of a 'global
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' like English will threaten national languages.
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 argument and
also
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 explains the conclusions with some illustrations. On the one hand,the wide use of a global
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 offers many great benefits that will never be achieved by a national
language
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. A global
language
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 not only helps in understanding different cultures of people but
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promote
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promotes
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 unity among communities of diverse cultural backgrounds.
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,
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 understanding actually helps in overcoming the
language
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 barrier among different nations living in different parts of the world. No doubt, English actually helps in
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 of the unique cultural heritage that comes from different beliefs and traditions.
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, some people assert that English is
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 recognised
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 and can prohibit the use of native tongues like
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,
punjabi
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,
spanish
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 etc. , that can ultimately lead to
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the extinction
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 of traditional languages.
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,the next generation of bilingual
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 speakers can lose proficiency in speaking their traditional
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, the national languages will die out gradually and become extinct in the near future. There is no doubt that losing proficiency in
national
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language
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 can eventually risk the future of the native tongue. In conclusion, I believe that the preservation of tradition is equally important for
mainting
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maintaining
 the diversity of various communities. Some effective measures should be taken by
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the government
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government
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governments
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 of different countries to promote their unique culture.

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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure that the essay has a clear overall logical structure, with well-organized paragraphs that each focus on a single main idea. Use cohesive devices appropriately to link ideas and paragraphs together.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present, but to enhance their effectiveness, ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and your stance, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points while restating your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with more developed and relevant examples. This entails providing specific illustrations that tie back to the argument being made, rather than general observations.
task achievement
To achieve a higher score in task response, ensure that the essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt, presents a clear position throughout the response, and develops arguments with comprehensive coverage of the topic.
task achievement
Your ideas are generally clear, but to make them more comprehensive, expand on the explanations and provide deeper insights into how the spread of a global language affects national languages.
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Illustrate your points with more relevant and specific examples. This can involve citing case studies, research, or statistics that support your argument and demonstrate the impact of a global language on national languages.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • international communication
  • erode
  • linguistic diversity
  • transmitted
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • diluted
  • dominant
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language policies
  • real-time translation
  • technological advancements
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