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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps
depicts
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depict
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 the former construction and
latter
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the latter
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 reconstruction of a recreational facility.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the new building has some erected houses at the
center
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centre
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, with
inclusion
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the inclusion
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 of
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 and reception.
Whereas
, the beach and trees remained at
same
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the same
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 location.
To begin
 with, the flowers located at the previous construction in the north-east end
was
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were
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 replaced with new buildings which happen to be in
circular
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a circular
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 position built at the right and left ends. Looking at the sea in the previous west end, it has been replaced with a plier and two
tent
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tents
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 at the vehicle track entrance of the building.
Although
, the meters of the two buildings still remained at 100.
Beside
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Besides
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 that, there is a newly built swimming pool
at
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in
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 the west region
as well as
 an eatery zone and reception which demarcate the recently erected accommodations. The sea
at
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in
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 the north-east region, trees and beach remained unchanged.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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