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The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.

The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.
#bar #show #percentage #water #consumption #australia
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The provided graphs depict information on how the Australians used
water
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 in 2004,
in
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addition
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 it shows the percentage of
water
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 consumption in residential houses. A glance at the pie chart makes it clear that, in the given period, a high percentage of
water
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 was used in a residential house, which shows 57%
while
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,
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 others didn’t even reach 20%. Turning to details on the bar chart, the
date
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data
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 is measured as percentages and there are six fields where the
water
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 was used. They are
bathroom
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, toilet, washing clothes, kitchen, and garden. It can be clearly observed that
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bathroom
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the bathroom
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 and garden ranked
first,
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both reached almost 25%. Washing clothes didn’t get as over 25% as
bathroom
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 and garden but despite
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this
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this,
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 it could rank third place. Regarding to Toilet and kitchen, compared to
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bathroom
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the bathroom
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 there were less
twice
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than twice
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, bathroom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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