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Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? Do you think this wiil be the case in the future?

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Most individuals nowadays have a sense of insecurity both at home and outdoors. I think that some reasons critically outweigh the rest, so let’s deep dive into the most significant ones. At
first,
individuals may not feel safe at home
due to
 the presence of domestic violence or abusive relationships.
Furthermore
, social, and economic inequality within human beings
lead
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 to unsafe feelings in the daily lives of people. Mainly disparities in low-quality education, lack of employment opportunities
due to
rising
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the rising
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 number of populations and poor wealth
condition
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conditions
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 raise social unrest and crime among individuals.
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task response
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development
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conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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