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The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the distribution of YouTube users worldwide as of January 2023 by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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 distribution of
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Youtube
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users
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 worldwide is divided into 6
age
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groups
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. The first bucket is for 18- 24
years
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 old humans, followed by 25- 34
years
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 old, 35- 44
years
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 old, 45- 54
years
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 old, 55- 64
years
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 old and the 65 +
years
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 old
group
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. Teenagers below 18
years
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 old and kids are not included on the list as they aren't allowed yet to register for a
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Youtube
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 account. The given information is populated from data that was taken in January 2023. The 25- 34
years
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 old
group
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 represented the biggest chunk of
Youtube
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users
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 in the world by
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. It was
then
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 followed by 2 other
age
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groups
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 around it which were the 18- 24
years
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 old
group
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 and the 35- 44
years
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 old
group
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 which shared an equal proportion. It can be concluded that
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users
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 largely came from teenagers and young adults( those aged below 44
years
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 old), which accounted for the statistic by more than a half.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
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users
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 is declining in senior adult
groups
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( those aged above 44
years
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 old). In total, these senior adult
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 constituted approximately 30% of
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 population,
majority
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the majority
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 were from
45
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the 45
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- 54
years
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 old
group
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 which
were
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 not yet
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 into pension
years
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. All in all,
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Youtube
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 was overwhelmingly more popular amongst the younger
age
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groups
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 worldwide.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, youtube, users, groups, years, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • user base
  • demographic
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • trend
  • mid-range
  • teenagers
  • young adults
  • middle-aged adults
  • elderly adults
  • global implications
  • marketers
  • content creators
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