In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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rather they will have access to
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information online
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no cost. I completely disagree with
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because reading news on the screen causes health
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and it is expensive to purchase
phone
gadgets. First of all , reading news from online
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through the
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of mobile
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and
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exposes one to health
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. To elucidate
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,
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of the eyes to the screen of
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the
eye
because of the radiation that emits from the screen. To illustrate,
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an ophthalmologist Dr Eke, working in the ophthalmology department complained that
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of his patients suffer from myopia and
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eye
disease
as a result
of too much exposure of the
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from cellphones.He
further
advised that the
eye
is a delicate organ and it should be protected at all
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.
Hence
the side effect of using the website to get
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.
Furthermore
,it is costly to buy these gadgets and most people cannot afford to get one.
Also
, information from the internet needs data for it to be accessed which sometimes will not be
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convenient
for individuals staying in the rural area.Moreso, the aged ones are not technologically inclined ,they find it hard to operate a
phone
.
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, my grandmother in the village
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it difficult to make
use
of the
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in her device, she gets frustrated trying to find the way out of it and
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the end she
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interest
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it.
Therefore
, the cost involved in buying a device and the challenge involved in operating it is the reason
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publication
materials will not be out of
use
. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the notion of printed publications fading away as getting news from
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is detrimental to health,high-priced and hard to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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