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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line graph provided
is illustrates
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a
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the
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 number of
requests
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 received in
person
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, by letter or email and
telephone
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by telephone
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 calls in order to get information from tour
agency
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agencies
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 in the United Kingdom within the first term of the year. It is apparent that
,
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in
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in-person
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person
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 and telephone
requests
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 were the highest and the lowest detected respectively in January month,
Linking Words
however
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however,
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 the
requests
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 received by letter or email
was
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were
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 moderate. Toward
to
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apply
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the end of
chart
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the chart
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in
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apply
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person
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person,
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requests
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 skyrocketed and reached the highest target.
Similar
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The similar
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 trend
observed
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was observed
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on by
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in
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 telephone
requests
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 which finished
at
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in
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the
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apply
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second place. The only exception is by letter or email
requests
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 experiencing reduction and becoming less used. At the early
star
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start
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 of the year
in
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apply
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person
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request
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requests
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was
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were
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 slightly over
the
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apply
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400

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words requests, person with synonyms.
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