Some people think dangerous sports should be banned, while others believe that people should be free to do any activities or sports. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Part of the world believes that it is better to
leagally
stop the Correct your spelling
legally
sports
that are life
threatenning
, Correct your spelling
threatening
while
others think that everyone has their own right to do what ever
they want. I Correct your spelling
whatever
also
agree with the latter part because it can be beneficial to some people
.
Number
of Change the article
A number
The number
people
today speak out saying that they are against of
Change preposition
apply
the
dangerous Correct article usage
apply
sports
due to
the fact that, many sports men
ended up Correct your spelling
sportsmen
loosing
their lives Replace the word
losing
at the end
of these activities. In addition
, there are plenty of researches
showing that thousands of Fix the agreement mistake
research
sports men
Correct your spelling
sportsmen
such
as car racers and bike racers, ended up leaving their careers with serious physical injuries and ended up being dead or disabled persons. For example
, my cousin
brother who was a bike racer back Change noun form
cousin's
then
ended up loosing
his Replace the word
losing
life
during a race
accident.
Change the verb form
racing
Nevertheless
, plenty of them starting
to do these Wrong verb form
start
sports
to overcome their inner fears. There are some people
in the
society that they can not even look down from a simple height. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, doing these sports
can made
up Change the verb form
make
be made
psychologicaly
strong Correct your spelling
psychologically
psychological
persons
. SinceReplace the word
people
,
they are facing their own fears. Remove the comma
apply
For Instance
, My closest friend had fear
of Correct article usage
a fear
height
since a kid Fix the agreement mistake
heights
therefore
, she ended up doing Correct article usage
the bunjee
bunjee
jump to overcome her own fear which ended up being very successful.
In conclusion, part of the society Correct your spelling
bungee
strongly
against Add a missing verb
is strongly
of
dangerous Change preposition
apply
sports
hence
, many people
ended
up being dead or Wrong verb form
end
disable
from these Wrong verb form
disabled
sports
. On the other hand
, these sports
create fearless men and women to
the world. So we must give the Change preposition
in
people
to
freedom to do whatever they want because Change preposition
apply
athough
we banned these Correct your spelling
although
sports
we cant
get rid of Correct your spelling
can't
life threatening
situations in Add a hyphen
life-threatening
the
Correct article usage
apply
life
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structure
Make sure that your essay has a clear structure with an introduction that presents the topic and a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint. Try to include a thesis statement that outlines your discussion points.
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I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
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