Some people think dangerous sports should be banned, while others believe that people should be free to do any activities or sports. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Part of the world believes that it is better to
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legally
stop the
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that are
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threatenning
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threatening
,
while
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others think that everyone has their own right to do
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whatever
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they want. I
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agree with the latter part because it can be beneficial to some
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of
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today speak out saying that they are against
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the
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dangerous
sports
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due to
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the fact that, many
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sports men
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sportsmen
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ended up
loosing
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their lives
at the end
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of these activities.
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, there are plenty of
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showing that thousands of
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sports men
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sportsmen
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such
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as car racers and bike racers, ended up leaving their careers with serious physical injuries and ended up being dead or disabled persons.
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, my
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brother who was a bike racer back
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ended up
loosing
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his
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during a
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accident.
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, plenty of them
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to do these
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to overcome their inner fears. There are some
people
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in
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society that they can not even look down from a simple height.
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, doing these
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can
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up
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psychologically
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strong
persons
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people
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. Since
,
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they are facing their own fears.
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, My closest friend had
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a fear
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of
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since a kid
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, she ended up doing
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the bunjee
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bunjee
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bungee
jump to overcome her own fear which ended up being very successful. In conclusion, part of the society
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against
of
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apply
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dangerous
sports
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hence
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, many
people
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ended
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end
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up being dead or
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disabled
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from these
sports
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.
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, these
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create fearless men and women
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in
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the world. So we must give the
people
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to
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freedom to do whatever they want because
athough
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although
we banned these
sports
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we
cant
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can't
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get rid of
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life threatening
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life-threatening
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situations in
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apply
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life
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.
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