The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The  diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The
map
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illustrates how the central
library
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differs when compared to the floor
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of the
library
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of 20 years ago.
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it is clear that
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the main hall inside the entrance guarantees a larger space by removing tables and chairs which were located in the centre of the
library
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. Looking at the maps more closely, we can see that
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current
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is the result of adopting the development of the technology. Though 20 years ago, enquiry desks took up large space in the southeastern part of the
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, they were substituted with information desks and self-service machines not requiring much space.
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of an enquiry desk, a café was created for rest and relaxation.
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, the computer room was renovated at the southwestern corner of the
library
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which used to be a reading room 2 decades ago.
Whereas
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there was a big room for CDs, videos, and computer games at the upper right part of the
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, now there are new sofas for storytelling events and children can enjoy fiction books
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, library with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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