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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two Europeans countries from 2011 to 2015.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two Europeans countries from 2011 to 2015.
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The chart gives information about the rate of divorce between 2011 and 2015 in
Finland
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 and
Sweden
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. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that statistics recorded that there was a slight increase in the rate of divorce in
Finland
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 compared to
Sweden
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,
while
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 in 2015 the visa versus
Sweden
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 was higher than in
Finland
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. In the first year,
Sweden
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 was considerably higher compared to
Finland
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 44% and 38% respectively.
whereas
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 in 2012
Sweden
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’s people who divorced significantly rose to approximately close to 50%,
while
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 in
Finland
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 was declined.The year after
Sweden
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’s record slight decline of under 50%.In 2014 there were nearly rates recorded in
Sweden
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 and
Finland
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 45% and 41% respectively. By the end of statistics, the vira is true that
Finland
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 had a significant increase,
whereas
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Sweden
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’s rates dramatically decreased to over 40%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words finland, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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