Some students prefer to live with their parents while pursuing university education. However, others stay away from parents what ate advantages and disadvantages of living in either way?

In
this
contemporary epoch, some people reckon that staying in the same household with
parents
while
studying in university is efficient in terms of economy,
in contrast
to the past where people
are tend
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to go abroad for educational purposes.
However
, is it really justifiable? I personally believe living away from
parents
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my parents
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while
pursuing
degree
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would be more beneficial in all aspects.
To begin
with,
firstly
, there are various reasons
on
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why people
are assuming
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that living with
parents
is immensely worthwhile. The most accurate is about assured
living-cost
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living cost
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and
tution-fee
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tuition fee
.
For instance
, students
are tend
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to have a hectic schedule in class
such
as seminars and lectures, and because of
this
, they often
forgot
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about their primary needs like breakfast, brunch, or dinner.
Whereas
when they live with their
parents
, all meals and any homework are provided so all they need to do is just
to
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focus on their
study
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studies
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.
On the other hand
, the capability of college
student
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students
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who live alone is wider than the ones who live with
parents
. Living alone will broaden their opportunities to be independent, and train themselves in forthcoming obstacles in society.
For example
,
i
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I
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have experienced living away from my
parents
while
pursuing
degree
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a degree
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in a different city to my hometown. At
first,
I genuinely felt pressured and frustrated to handle everything by myself yet still
have
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to finish all the university
task
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perfectly.
In addition
, after completely
adapt
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in
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the new environment and having supportive surroundings,
i
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I
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managed to sort out all of my responsibilities. I even settled to join some organisations and communities to expand my networking, since socialising is the only key to surviving when you live far from home. All in all, l believe life
wouldn't
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won't
end when you decide to live independently for university purposes.
Besides
, there is so much more to gain for your self-development
such
as interpersonal
skill
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skills
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,
problem- solving
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problem-solving
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skill
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skills
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, and critical thinking. Little did you know, living alone will give you a wide opportunity to be free and do whatever you want, yet still challenging yourself whether you could survive or not in the upcoming society.
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Task Achievement
Make sure your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of living with parents and living away while studying at university. Your essay discusses the disadvantages of living with parents and advantages of living away, but does not fully explore the advantages of living with parents.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a clear and logical structure in your essay. Your introduction should present the topic and outline the main points that will be discussed. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and be elaborated upon with supporting details.
Coherence and Cohesion
In your conclusion, ensure that you summarize the main points of your argument and clearly state your position. The essay should leave the reader with a final thought that reflects the content and viewpoint expressed in the body.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional support
  • Financial implications
  • Self-reliance
  • Personal growth
  • Social networking
  • Professional contacts
  • Household chores
  • Independence
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Burden
  • Engage
  • Proximity
  • Conducive
  • Insulated
  • Opportunities
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