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Living in Ankara is much cheaper than living in Istanbul. Do you agree or disagree?

#ankara #istanbul
It is believed that life in
Istanbul
 is more expensive as compared to life in
Ankara
. I completely agree that living in
Ankara
 is more affordable than living in
Istanbul
 because rent and
transportation
prices
 are lower in
Ankara
. First of all, the accommodation
prices
 are
less
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lower
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 in
Ankara
.
In other words
, government officers generally live in
Ankara
 and their salary is lower than other people
hence
, rent
prices
 are lower than
Istanbul
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in Istanbul
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.
For example
,
according to
 the
Turkish
 presidential office, all ministry offices are in
Ankara
. Most government officers live in
Ankara
 and
this
 makes the rent
prices
 lower than
Istanbul
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in Istanbul
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.
Thus
, it makes living in
Ankara
 more easier than living in
Istanbul
.
Secondly
, the
transportation
 price is cheaper in
Ankara
. What I mean is that, in
Istanbul
, the
populatıon
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population
 is higher than
Ankara
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in Ankara
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 and
this
 makes
the
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public
transportation
 busy.
As a result
,
this
 high population in
Istanbul
 directly affects
the
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transportation
 fees.
For instance
,
according to
 the
Turkish
 Ministry of
Transportation
, in
Ankara
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Ankara,
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one
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the
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 way underground metro ticket price is 15
turkish
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Turkish
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 lira
on the other hand
Istanbul
 one way underground metro ticket price is 30
turkish
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 lira.
This
 is
as
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apply
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a result of a higher population in
Istanbul
 which makes
transportation
 busy.
Hence
, life is easier in
Ankara
. In summary, it is argued that
Ankara
 is more livable than
Istanbul
. In my opinion, I thınk that residing in
Ankara
 is better economically than
Istanbul
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in Istanbul
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 because accommodation and commuting expenses are lower
ın
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in
Ankara
.
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