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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many
books
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 at Burnaby Public Library were read between 2011 and 2014 by different gender categories:
men
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 and
women
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. In four years,
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women led
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 by reading more at the beginning of the period before being outraced by
men
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 in the
last
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year
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.
As a result
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, males
finally
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 turned the gap from falling behind females at the beginning into having an even bigger difference in the number of
books
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 read
at the end
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 of the period. At the beginning, of the
year
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 2011,
women
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 started with around 5.000
books
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 read and steadily increased to exactly 10.000 in two years.
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, the amount plummeted by about 3.000 just a
year
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 later, resulting in a shift in rank between them and the
men
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. Meanwhile, only less than 4.000
books
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 were consumed by
men
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 at first in 2011. After that, the number eventually reached 4.000 in a
year
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 before significantly rising to 10.000 in 2013. In that
year
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,
books
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 read by
men
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 tied numbers with the ones read by
women
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.
After
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this
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,
men
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 outpaced them and widened the gap to more than 6.000 and hit their peak by reading 14.000
books
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at the end
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 of the period in 2014.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, men, women, year with synonyms.
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