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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They ssy that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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The illustration presents information about women and men in the UK by age group who ate more than five servings of
fruit
 and
vegetables
 per day in 2006. We can see that the
overall
 trend is an increase in the percentage of people who consumed five or more portions of
fruit
 and
vegetables
 per day. The bar chart shows that the increase was a rising trend
is
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in the span of 19-24 and up to 56-64 age. After
that
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 we
observe
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 a little drop
the
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 percentage of males and females who were into eating
fruit
 and
vegetables
 per day. The majority of humans who took
fruit
 and
vegetables
 were aged from 55 to 65.
By contrast
, the smallest number of individuals who were interested in
fruit
 and
vegetable
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 were aged from 19 to 24. The percentages for males and females who
consuming
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consumed
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 more than five portions were aged from 25 to 54 were similar. It can
be see
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 that in all the age groups the percentage of females ate more than males.
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task response
Ensure that your essay directly responds to the question prompt, rather than presenting unrelated information.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay should have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, each serving their purpose in the overall structure of the essay.
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Include specific examples or data to support your main points. Without relevant specifics, your argument may be weak or unconvincing.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a logical flow between sentences and paragraphs to guide the reader effortlessly through your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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