The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralian cities.
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The bar graph illustrates five distinct Australian
residents
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' percentage of habitual activities of buying and drinking
coffee
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and tea.
Overall
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, it can be vividly seen that in the
last
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4 weeks, city dwellers have relished drinking
coffee
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at a cafe, except citizens in Adelaide who are very likely to buy instant
coffee
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.
On the other hand
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, enjoying fresh
coffee
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became the
last
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favourable way for all the
residents
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. Looking at the data in a more detailed analysis, all Australians admire going to a cafe to enjoy their drink. Melbourne and Hobart
residents
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accounted for around 63%, which makes them the highest percentage.
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, in Adelaide, they become the
last
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position for activity (below a half). Turning to the figure
for instance
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coffee
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, every city makes a similar percentage around 45% in Sydney to almost 55% in Hobart. For the remaining category, which is drinking fresh
coffee
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, Brisbane and Adelaide have the lowest proportion of citizens who like to do
this
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activity. They both have only 34% of the total citizens.
Following
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this
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one, there are approximately 38% of Hobart
residents
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who like to do the same.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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