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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Govermnets
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Government
Governments
 funding has been a debatable subject in
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recent years. People argue that
goverments
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governments
government
 should be the
sponser
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sponsor
entinty
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entity
 in funding and controlling
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scientifc
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scientific
research
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. It is agreed that the
goverment
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government
 should have
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full control
in
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 the
funcding
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funding
as well as
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 the
cotrolling
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controlling
 factors.
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 is because
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scientific
research
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 costs
huge
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 amount of money and it benefits the country as a whole.
Firstly
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,
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scientifc
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scientific
research
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 over the years
was
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 known that it costs a lot of money. For
exmaple
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example
,
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scientifc
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scientific
research
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 on
atrifical
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artificial
intellegance
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intelligence
 will require a huge number of expensive high performing computers to handle the huge amount of data processing. Sadly, the private sector does not have enough
resourses
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resources
 to purchase these computers.
Therfore
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Therefore
,
this
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 makes it clear that private organizations are not capable of funding
such
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researches
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.
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, it is
widly
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widely
 known the
benfits
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benefits
 that
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scientifc
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scientific
research
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 can
return
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 to the country.
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, countries have been rotating on taking the chance to host Expo which is a
wold-wide
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 event where
contruies
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countries
centuries
 showcase
invention
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inventions
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 and
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.
This
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 is a great way for countries to
attrach
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attract
attach
 a lot of
tourits
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tourists
 which
make
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 the
conuty
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county
country
 a way of income.
This
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 is a quality that the private
secotr
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sector
 is unwilling to fund nor hots.
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,
this
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 makes it clear that
private
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the private
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sectors
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sector
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 will not be able to meet the needs of
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well funded
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scientifc
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scientific
research
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. In conclusion,
due to
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 the high cost of the process of
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scientifc
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scientific
research
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 and the
benfits
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benefits
 it holds for
goverments
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governments
.
It is clear that
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idea
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 of having the private
sectors
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 fund and control
the
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scientifc
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scientific
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that your essay addresses all components of the prompt comprehensively. Your response touches on why governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research but needs to cover more depth and provide comprehensive ideas and arguments.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, it is important to ensure your essay flows logically from one idea to the next. Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect your sentences and paragraphs.
grammar
Pay close attention to spelling and grammar. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'govermnets', 'sponser', 'funcding', 'cotrolling', 'scientifc', 'exmaple', 'atrifical', 'intellegance', 'resourses', 'benfits', 'contruies', 'tourits', 'conuty') that could be easily avoided with proofreading. Correct usage is essential for task success and to communicate your ideas clearly.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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