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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart provides
informations
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information
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 about Gross Domestic Product (GDP) from
IT
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the IT
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 and
service
industry
 in the United Kingdom between 1992 and 2000. The
unit
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units
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 are measured in percentage of GDP.
Overall
, both industries rose in the range of
years
altough
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although
 the IT
industry
 had way more significantly increased than
service
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the service
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industry
.
Although
 they
are
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doubled in 2000, but
theIT
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IT
industry
had
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was
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 way greater than
service
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the service
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industry
. In
the
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apply
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terms of IT
industries
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industry
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 development, it rose more than doubled to around 15% in 8
years
 from the beginning.
However
 it witnessed a
light
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slight
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 decrease in
year
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the year
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of
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1996, but it grew dramatically in the past 4
years
 and reached
peak
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a peak
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 in 2000.
IThe
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The
 greatest change went from less than 8% in 1996
into
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to
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 12% in 1998. Regarding the
service
industry
,
basically
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basically,
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 it grew
steadly
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steadily
 with light changes
along
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over
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 the
years
.
However
, from the
beginning
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 it still doubled in
year
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the year
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of
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2000, more than 8%. The biggest growth happened between 1992 and 1994, with more than
2
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a 2
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% difference.
While
 the next
years
 only altered slightly percentages, never be more than 1% every 2
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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