The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
The table denotes the salaries of secondary or high school teachers in 2009 in several
countries
such
as Australia
, Denmark, Luxembourg
, Japan
and Korea
.
Overall
, country
that possessed the lowest income was Add an article
a country
the country
Australia
, while
country
that Add an article
the country
a country
aforded
the highest salary was Correct your spelling
afforded
Luxembourg
. In addition
, After fifteen years
Change preposition
of experiences
experiences
, the salaries that were acquired by Fix the agreement mistake
experience
Australia
and Korea
was
similar.
Starting Correct subject-verb agreement
were
of
the income that was obtained by Replace the word
off
Add an article
the teacher
a teacher
teacher
in Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
Australia
only
$28,000, and it Add a missing verb
was only
become
the lowest Wrong verb form
became
than
other Change preposition
in
countries
. Teacher
in Fix the agreement mistake
Teachers
Japan
and Korea
gained income approximately
$30,000. Change preposition
of approximately
While
, paying
Wrong verb form
pay
to
Change preposition
for
Add an article
the teacher
a teacher
teacher
in Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
Denmak
was higher than Correct your spelling
Denmark
three
other Change preposition
in three
countries
like Australia
, Japan
and Korea
. Luxembourg
gave well-paid to teacher
which was $80,000.
After teachers had Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
an experiences
Correct the article-noun agreement
experiences
an experience
around
15 Change preposition
of around
years
, in Australia
and Korea
, they only received $48,000. Whereas
, Luxembourg
's country
was steady
becoming Change the word
steadily
country
that Correct article usage
a country
aforded
the teachers with the highest payment namely $119,000 than other Correct your spelling
afforded
countries
. It is also
clear that Louxemburg
, Correct your spelling
Luxembourg
Luxemburg
Japan
and Korea
attained maximum salary over 30 years
, and Australia
and Denmark were only thereinafter 10 years
.Submitted by fifi on
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