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Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

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The
news
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 always had an enormous influence on
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society.
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 the
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 didn't exist back in
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days
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, the main resources for people to get a piece of information were newspapers and TV
news
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 programmes. Of course, the time passed and their place was mostly taken by
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social media. Nowadays, everyone
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 been drowned in their phones and
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 all the
news
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 from
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 gadgets . Admittedly, there are a lot of benefits
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 obtaining
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 from the
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, a huge number of individuals lack time, because of a busy schedule or tonnes of work. The second reason,
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 newspapers and TV programs cost significant money,
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, some people choose to buy a subscription
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 an online magazine or don't spend cash at all, and just read data through media platforms. From my point of view,
Internet
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news
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 made our lives much effortless and I prefer
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 more, but there are
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 negative aspects of it. First of all, it is
unreliability
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 of information from the
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, since a lot of things, can simply be a lie. That's why we can rely more on television and newspapers, because they
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 check the information, before submitting it to a wide audience.
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, some journalists and publishers lose their jobs, because of not
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 magazines or
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 from TV and low profit. In conclusion, I would like to say, that
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 brought us new possibilities, absolute freedom for
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 industry and easier access, but we still should find the right solution for the people who are negatively affected by it.
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