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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.
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The line chart describes the number of Australian transfers to Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and India from 1990 to 2012.
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, Japan and the US had the same happen which decreased from the top to the bottom.
China
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 had the highest rate and that means Australians prefer to export to
China
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 more than
other place
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another place
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.
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 the figure,
China
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 started importing in 1990 by 2% after that it increased sharply to
reached
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 28% in 2012.
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, the US
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 from 1% in 1990 to 2000
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 it rose
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gradually
 from 2000 to 2010 and got 6% and it went down slightly in 2012. As we can see, there is a big difference between the heights of the two countries,
China
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 and India. Japan in the beginning,
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imported a lot from Australia in 1990, Suddenly it reduced dramatically in 1995 by 6%.
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, from 1995 to 2012 the export rate downward to 17%. On the opposite side, the US had many changes in
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 period.
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, from 1990 to 1995 it increased by 4%
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 it jumped in 2000 to 11%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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