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Task 1: Supermarket Plan The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Task 1: Supermarket Plan The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The maps depict the realisable
position
 of the
town
 supermarket in the
town
 of Grandson. By and large, the map illustrates
the
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plot
 1 in the countryside,
while
the
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plot
 2
close
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 the
town
central
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.
Plot
 1 is located northwest of the
town
 of Grandson, near the Hindon population which has 12,000 populations.
Initially
, industries are close to
position
 1, making it easy for workers to buy.
However
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 compared to
plot
 1 and
plot
 2,
plot
 1 has more access to public transportation, across
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the main road and railway. Moving on to
position
 2, it is located in the
central
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 of the city of Grandson that doesn’t have any traffic zone nearby the area.
Furthermore
, site 2 will have more access to the nearby cities of Cransdon and Bransdon, populated with 29,000 and 15,000 respectively.
In addition
,
position
 2 is estimated as the promising supermarket
due to
 the location being a short distance from the industries and housing area.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words position, town, plot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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