In many countries today crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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is a big city in Egypt. There are a lot of clubs, pubs,
casino
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, sights and different kinds of diving. It is so beautiful here and
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would like to visit
this
city so much.
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it is easy to lose yourself there that's why you should have
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. I think the peak season in
Sharm
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is winter
due to
very good weather, it has +20 degrees and more here, until it is cold
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season is summer because it is very hot here, and sometimes it is even hard to breathe. Hordes of tourists like to go
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, because it is forbidden in Russia and most of all countries and tourists
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to swim and
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in
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red sea. There are
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quaint towns near
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but they are so boring in my opinion. When
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come to
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want to live in lodging near to beach with a great landscape out of the window. There are a lot of robbers, drugs and low life quality in
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how
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prefer
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don't
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task response
Your essay does not directly address the topic provided about the popularity of crime novels and TV dramas. Instead, you've written about Sharm El Sheikh, which is unrelated to the given topic. Ensure you stick to the topic presented in the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. To improve, structure your essay with a clear opening statement, followed by supporting paragraphs, and a summarizing conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Develop your main points with relevant examples and explanations. Make sure your examples are specifically connected to the topic, in this case, the reasons behind the popularity of crime fiction and TV crime dramas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • intrigue
  • enigma
  • compelling
  • addictive
  • chilling
  • forensics
  • procedural
  • thriller
  • suspense
  • psychological
  • criminalistics
  • deviant
  • intricate
  • red herrings
  • misdirection
  • sardonically
  • socioeconomic
  • catharsis
  • moral ambiguity
  • multidimensional
  • protagonist
  • antagonist
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