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The table shows about underground railway system

The table shows about underground railway system
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The table provides information on the underground train network system in terms of the year the railway system was initiated, the routes covered, and how many
passengers
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travelling
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 annually for six major cities (London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles). Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, London is the oldest monorail service provider and evidently has the largest route
traveled
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travelled
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, but the cities that receive a large number of
passengers
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traveling
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travelling
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 annually are Paris and Tokyo. Looking at the details, London was the first city to open its rail route dating back to 1863, which
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 offers the longest route,
whereas
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 the Los Angeles railway, which was built in 2001, can be considered relatively new.
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, Tokyo's railway service, which was opened in 1927, has the largest number of
travelers
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travellers
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 (1927
passengers
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) among all other six cities,
while
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 Kyoto receives the fewest annually (45
passengers
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).

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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