The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
The table represents the income of both higher and
secondary
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secondary-level
level
educators
from five ditinct
countries in the year 2009.
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distinct
Overall
, the teachers
of Luxembourg were the highest earners all over the period whether
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while
australian
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Australian
teachers
were paid lowest
amount among all the nations. Correct article usage
the lowest
In addition
, the higher and secondary educators
from Denmark
took very less
time to get the higher wages.
The starting rate of salaries for Correct word choice
little
educators
in Luxembourg was 80,000 for both higher and secondary level
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levels
while
these
figure in Correct determiner usage
the
Denmark
was significantly lower with the
rate of 45,000. Correct article usage
a
Likewise
, the wages for fresher teacher
in other countries Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
was
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were
also
low at approximately 30,000.
Over the experience of 15 years, the teachers
of Luxembourge
earned Correct your spelling
Luxembourg
upto
119,000 Correct your spelling
up to
while
the educators
of Denmark
and Japan with same
experience Correct article usage
the same
level
made 54,000 and 65,000 respectively.
Meanwhile, the Australian and korean
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Korean
teachers
stood on same
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the same
level
of income with 48,000. However
, it took only 8 years to
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for
Denmark
to reach the maximum level
of pay in contrast
to other countries who
took approximately 30 years.Correct pronoun usage
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