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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

In many nations,
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 the levels of major
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 are declining,
people
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 feel more insecure than at any time before. The primary cause of
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 phenomenon is the
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 influence, and the most viable solution is a public awareness campaign warning
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 about
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 issue. Exaggeration from social
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 causes
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 among the citizens
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 if it is not true. The
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 and social
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 often focus on rare or bloody incidents and repeatedly show them, creating the impression that
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 is widespread.
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 results in an excessive
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 of going out or walking around at night.
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, in the United States, FBI statistics show that violent
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 rates have declined significantly since the 1990s.
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, a 2022 Gallup poll revealed that most Americans believe
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 is on the rise. The primary reason is that the
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, television, and even platforms like Facebook and Twitter exaggerate individual
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,
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 as shootings or violent robberies, creating the perception that the streets are more dangerous than they actually are. To tackle
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 the government should launch a publicity campaign in the
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 and in schools to educate
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 about what real life is like. Many
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 are afraid to go outside after dusk just because of
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, which is not in its place. An awareness campaign could shed some light on these difficult situations and allow
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 to be more open and honest about them.
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, a similar initiative in the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland resulted in a 52% decrease in
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 who are exaggerated in
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 of
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 that do not exist. In conclusion,
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crime
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 rates in many countries have significantly declined,
people
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 still feel unusually afraid because
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 outlets mainly highlight serious
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.
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,
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 issue can be mitigated by educating the public about the reality of
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 trends.

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structure
Make one clear idea for each part: the cause, the effect, and the fix. Use a simple order so the reader sees the link fast.
content
Add more detail on the fix. Say who will do the plan, what steps, and a time line so the plan feels real.
language
Connect the ideas with short linking phrases. Use words like 'also', 'but', 'and' to show how things go from one to the next.
language
Check the grammar in some long sentences so the meaning is not lost. Use short, direct lines.
content
You use real facts to back some points.
structure
The main idea is clear: media find fear and a plan to inform.
task
You give a plan that moves from problem to fix.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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