In the forthcoming, all cars buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
In the future, all car
buses
anf
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and
trucks
will ne
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be
driveless
. In this
essay, I will argue that driveless
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driverless
vehicles
have more disadvantages than the
advantages.
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apply
Firstly
, auto drive
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driving
buses
and trucks
increase
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increases
unemployment
rate. As a large number Add an article
the unemployment
or
drivers are no longer needed for the job which has been taken by artificial intelligence. The higher Correct your spelling
of
technology
, the Correct article usage
the technology
less
jobs for Change the quantifier
fewer
human
. As Fix the agreement mistake
humans
the
result, a lot of people will lose their jobs which cause Correct article usage
a
to
Change preposition
apply
the
increase Correct article usage
an
of
unemployment. Change preposition
in
This
also
leads to other social problems as many people are in financial crisis. Therefore
, driveless
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driverless
buses
and trucks
are unhelpful to society.
Secondly
, vehicles
without drivers may cause more traffic accidents than usual. This
is because driveless
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driverless
vehicles
don't have human
to control the steering, Fix the agreement mistake
humans
react
to the traffic situation promptly and rationally. Correct word choice
and react
Besides
that, cars with auto drive are likely to have technical issues which stop the car from moving and cause the accident. For example
, in the news, in
the highway, there Change preposition
on
was
several Change the verb form
were
vehicles
got in an accidents
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an accident
accidents
due to
an auto drive
car stopped working Replace the word
driver
suddently
. Correct your spelling
suddenly
Hence
, no
drivers Correct word choice
if no
to
control the cars, more accidents may happen.
In conclusion, cars, Fix the infinitive
apply
buses
and trucks
should be driven by human
. Fix the agreement mistake
humans
This
is not only good for societies, but also
for the safety of everyone in the traffics
.Correct subject-verb agreement
traffic
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