The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.

The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
The provided bar chart depicts data on Bulgarian people's
education
level who
prefeered
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preferred
to continue their life in foreign countries over a
6 year
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period. A glance at the bar chart makes it clear that
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secondary
education
ranked first among the others in both years,
while
higher and primary
education
have not experienced rapid changes. Looking at the details
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,it can be clearly observed that,the number of higher
education
students who wanted to emigrate stayed
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steady
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level , but in
2008
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year it
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decreased by half. Focusing
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primary
education
,it saw an improvement trend.The percentage of students who wanted to move
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countries in lower
education
made up 18% and 19% in 2002 and 2006 respectively.
Although
,it remained stable in both years,in 2008 doubled 2 times. It is interesting to note that,higher
education
remained static, despite the fact that it was the highest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • tertiary education
  • secondary education
  • primary education
  • trend
  • intentions
  • emigrate
  • demographics
  • percentages
  • fluctuation
  • statistics
  • depict
  • overseas
  • significant
  • increase/decrease
  • pattern
  • move abroad
  • educational attainment
  • time frame
  • compare
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • summarize
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