In some countries, some criminal trials are shown on TV so people can watch the trials live. Do you think the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages?

In a number of countries, there are many TV shows allowing people to watch lawsuits live. In my way of thinking, the pros of
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of mind can do
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, shoplifting and pickpocketing are types of lawlessness that society should be aware of. Another benefit, these shows are for
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entertainment.
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, in my family watching the lawsuits based on real events is the favorite kind of taking the rest after a working day. In common, the different movies of
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of crime are the most attractive
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satisfaction if successful. In conclusion, generally speaking, the crime trials, that are shown on TV, have mentioned
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Task Response
Make sure to give equal consideration to both sides of the argument; the essay leans heavily towards the advantages without adequately addressing the disadvantages.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a more detailed introduction that outlines the key points you will discuss in your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
End with a stronger conclusion summarizing your key points more clearly and stating your final opinion succinctly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a wider range of connectors and discourse markers to guide the reader through your argument and signal the structure of your essay.
Task Response
Supplement your main points with more specific examples and explanations to fully develop your argument.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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