The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart and graph chart illustrate the data on
crime
in the UK
last
year breaking down by
age
groups
and types. Nearly half of the
crimes
in the UK
last
year belong to violent
crimes
. Property
crime
and drug-related
crime
rank second and third at 23% and 22% respectively. Just below one-tenth of the
crimes
are public order violations. There are discrepancies in the rate of
crime
by
age
groups
Fix the agreement mistake
group
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. The
crime
rates
in children aged 8 and under are negligible. The
crime
rate started at 5
crimes
per ten thousand in the population
age
12. The
age
groups
that
crime
rates
are significantly higher than the others are 16, 20, and 24 years at 70, 80, and 60
crimes
per ten thousand citizens. These
rates
are much decreased in adults who are 24 and older. At the
age
of 24,
crime
rates
are only one-third of the previous category at just 20 per ten thousand. These trends gradually decline over
age
until the
age
of 44, when the
rates
of
crimes
level off at just below 10% towards older
age
groups
. Violent
crime
is the most prevalent type of
crime
in the UK. The population
that is
most responsible for these
crimes
are the ones in their teenage years and early twenties.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, groups, crimes, rates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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