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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart and graph chart illustrate the data on
crime
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 in the UK
last
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 year breaking down by
age
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groups
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 and types. Nearly half of the
crimes
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 in the UK
last
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 year belong to violent
crimes
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. Property
crime
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 and drug-related
crime
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 rank second and third at 23% and 22% respectively. Just below one-tenth of the
crimes
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 are public order violations. There are discrepancies in the rate of
crime
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 by
age
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groups
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group
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. The
crime
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rates
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 in children aged 8 and under are negligible. The
crime
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 rate started at 5
crimes
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 per ten thousand in the population
age
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 12. The
age
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groups
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 that
crime
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rates
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 are significantly higher than the others are 16, 20, and 24 years at 70, 80, and 60
crimes
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 per ten thousand citizens. These
rates
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 are much decreased in adults who are 24 and older. At the
age
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 of 24,
crime
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rates
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 are only one-third of the previous category at just 20 per ten thousand. These trends gradually decline over
age
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 until the
age
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 of 44, when the
rates
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 of
crimes
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 level off at just below 10% towards older
age
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groups
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. Violent
crime
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 is the most prevalent type of
crime
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 in the UK. The population
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 most responsible for these
crimes
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 are the ones in their teenage years and early twenties.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, groups, crimes, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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