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The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and make comparisons where relevant.
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The below table illustrates some
informations
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 about age, average revenue per person and society under
poverty
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the poverty
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 line in California,
Utal
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Utah
 and
Florida
. It is conspicuous the proportion that they are under
poverty
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the poverty
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 line in California is more than the others.
According to
 the chart, In California aged under 18 is 17 per cent, In Utal is 28 per cent and in
Florida
 is 16 per cent.
Furthermore
, the population below
poverty
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 line has the highest percentage in spite of the fact that they earn more revenue.
Moreover
, the percentage of people
who
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aged over 60 in Utal is 8
person
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 and in
Florida
 is slightly over
than
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one
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in
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fifths.
In addition
, the average income in
Florida
 is 22,000 and in Utal is 17,000. In conclusion, the following diagram demonstrates some
datas
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data
 about age, average income per person and population under
poverty
 in three states in The United States of America.
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