the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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person in 4 countries from 1967 to 2007.
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Kingdom decreased slightly and Portugal rose sharply in these 40 years. There was a stayed trend in
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from 1967 to 1977. It started from 11 Co2
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in metric
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in these 2 years. After that, there was gradually went down between 1977 to 2007. There
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9 Co2
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in 2007. It is still the highest
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in 4 countries. Portugal went up modestly from 1967 to 1987, 1997 to 2007. But there was a significant went up from 1987 to 1997. It went up from 1 to 5 in 40 years. Portugal and Italy
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the lowest Co2
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in the chart. Italy
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in 1967. There was a
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rise from 1967 to 1977. But it went down sharply between 1977 and 1987. It
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1997 to 2007. Swedeen increased sharply
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1967 to 2007.
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