There is certainly a difference in thoughts, ideas and actions between children, their parents and grandparents. Why do these differences exist? Does it cause problems in your community, in your opinion?

It's very common to have
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similarity
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in the way of thinking, making ideas, and doing something. The world we live
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always evolving
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time
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with human development.
Techonology
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and
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conditions are the most affecting aspects. Technology is
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of the crucial
thing
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that affect our daily
life
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. If we look back 100 years from now, people still exchange
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with
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and the waiting
time
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to today's condition
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only
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second
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to do it. Because of that older generations
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patient and value the process.
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to
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the younger
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, because from the moment they
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burned
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time
already there, they tend to want everything
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. Nation conditions
also
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one of the most affecting factors to consider. Most of our
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generation
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born
during
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hard
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. World
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II, conflicts
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within
the nations, and many other events that
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the
generation
that
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at that
time
tougher
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other
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that
borned
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when the country
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stabil
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stable
condition. All the differences
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between
generation
in my community are the strong point. We can get a better solution because each
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generation
have
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their
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its
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on
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own
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point that
they
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pointed
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and by
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discussing
it together we can generate a solution that beneficiary
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everyone. The older
generation
with their experiences will point out the
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carefulness
and stability and the younger
generation
will make the most efficient solution.
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Ensure consistency in spellings (e.g., 'unsimillarity' should be 'dissimilarity', 'whithin' should be 'within').
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Use a wider range of vocabulary to more precisely convey your ideas.
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Organize ideas into more structured paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
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Work on sentence structure to ensure that sentences are grammatically correct and clear.
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Check your work for typographical errors ('techonology' should be 'technology', 'borned' should be 'born').

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Generational gaps
  • Differing experiences
  • Socio-economic conditions
  • Formal education
  • Economic hardship
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital age
  • Worldviews
  • Conflicts
  • Misunderstandings
  • Tradition and continuity
  • Change and innovation
  • Dialogue
  • Exchange of ideas
  • Wisdom and experience
  • Fresh ideas
  • Problem-solving
  • Cultural tapestry
  • Adaptability and resilience
  • Social divides
  • Intergenerational dialogue
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