The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
change
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of three metals'
price
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prices
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with
monthly
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a monthly
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change
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towards 12
months
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in 2014.
Overall
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, the price of nickel and copper experienced
decline
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a decline
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,
while
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Zinc
looked
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apply
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went up in the
last
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period of time. In the first six
months
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, all of the metals'
percentage
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of
change
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significantly decreased. At
first,
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nickel was in the highest position
that
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apply
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stood
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standing
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at 6%
then
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dramatically dipped to the lowest
percentage
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along the period at -3%.
On the other hand
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, zinc increased
for
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by
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2% before gradually
fell
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falling
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to a negative
percentage
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.
However
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, there was a moderate decline
for
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in
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the
percentage
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of
change
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of copper which made it in the first rank in June.
Move
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Moving
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to the next six
months
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, all of the
type
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types
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of metals
were
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apply
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remainly
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remaining
remained
mainly
stable for three
months
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before
finally
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climbed
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climbing
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. Ultimately, nickel, copper, and zinc
were
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apply
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only had a slight
different
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difference
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which stood at 1%, 1,5%, and 2%, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, months, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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