The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

#changes #palce #waterfront #area #town #calles #darwin

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The

map

Use synonyms

given illustrates Darwin's waterfront area's changes between 2009 and 2014.

Overall

Linking Words

, it can be seen that by elimination of industrial

area

Fix the agreement mistake

areas

show examples

reforestation has occurred in the south of the

map

Use synonyms

. In 2009, in the middle of the

map

Use synonyms

, some residential buildings were

seen

Verb problem

apply

show examples

located in front of the factories.

Then

Linking Words

, they were improved in 2014,

also

Linking Words

industrial areas south of houses and the middle of the circle footpath were destroyed.

Therefore

Linking Words

, another swimming pool was established in the west of the circle footpath.

In addition

Linking Words

, some new green spaces were located in the southwest in 2014.

Moreover

Linking Words

, the new university was built on the west of the

map

Use synonyms

close to the residential area.

Also

Linking Words

, we observe that a harbour was built in the southeast in 2014. Another footpath was built from the harbour which connects the sea to the forest.

Submitted by arefehbks on Tue Jan 30 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

▼

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

▼

Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.

▼

6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

142 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

<4
band
You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisa5on. Write a le9er to the manager of the organisa5on where you are going to do work experience. In your le=er • thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience • explain what you hope to learn from the work experience • ask some ques5ons about the work experience you are going to do
I am very happy and excited that I am going to work experience at CNN 03 juonary and I am very grateful to you, Mr. Brown, for giving me this job opportunity and I hope that my cooperaDon will be effecDve and help the growth of the organizaDon.
5.5
band
In some countries, rich countries are becoming rich and poor are becoming poorer. What are the causes of this problem? How can this problem be tackle? educat, governm, spent earn
It is clear that the countries that have good economies increase their budgets, although the poor countries lose money day by day. Most people know that this is the result of the economic strategy of governments. In my essay, i will explain solutions like education and the causes of this problem.
<4
band
Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live luxurious lives, in contrast, academicians and scientists earn far less. Do you agree that academicians and scientist ought to be paid more?
Modernized world the famous persons in the entertainment and sports field are getting high profits than the peoples those who are working in educational and research industry scientists. I completely disagree for this huge difference of benefits between both of them in the society.
5
band
The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Safety in transportation is a highly popular topic due to the rise of accidents on the roads.Some people support that the best way to increase road transport safety is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year.Personally, I disagree with this statement, which will be shown in this essay.
6.5
band
Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this day and age, it has remains as a souce of controversy what kind of achievement schools should reward their students. While there are some good arguments in favour of the view that schools just prioritize academic results, I would argue that other types of accomplishment should be included.

The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

In some countries, rich countries are becoming rich and poor are becoming poorer. What are the causes of this problem? How can this problem be tackle? educat, governm, spent earn

Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live luxurious lives, in contrast, academicians and scientists earn far less. Do you agree that academicians and scientist ought to be paid more?

The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.