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The line graph below shows the household recyclling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the household recyclling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The below line graph demonstrates the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany between 2005 and 2015.
Furthermore
, all of the graphs have an
upwire
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upward
 trend except France.
According to
 the chart, In 2005 almost 32 per cent of people do recycling in The United Kingdom.
In addition
, one
in fifths
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 of households perform recycling and in 2015 slightly over
than
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60 per cent performed recycling.
Moreover
, In 2011 almost 45 per cent
conduct
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conducted
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 recycling,
also
 In 2013 around one
in
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seconds
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second
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 of
regional
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the regional
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household
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households
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do
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did
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 recycling. Plus, between 2007 and 2009 we do not have
a
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significant growth. In conclusion,
this
 line graph illustrates what percentage of households conduct recycling. It is conspicuous
in
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that in
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 2005 France had the highest percentage,
while
 in 2015 had the lowest percentage.
Moreover
, between 2007 and 2009 we do not have
a
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significant growth.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • household recycling rates
  • trend analysis
  • comparison
  • significant
  • increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • plateau
  • progress
  • environmental implications
  • rate
  • peak
  • upward/downward trend
  • percentage
  • consistently
  • period
  • surpass
  • level off
  • stagnate
  • benchmark
  • time frame
  • sustainable practices
  • waste management
  • recycle
  • dispose
  • landfill
  • renewable resource
  • conservation
  • eco-friendly
  • green initiative
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