Some experts suggest people a method to solve the environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuels and all vehicles. To what extent do you agree with this point? and make comparisons where relevant.

Environmental pollution has been a viral topic in contemporary society. One of the biggest contributors to air pollution
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carbon dioxide emission. It is disagreed that the solution to solve
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problem is to charge more for fuels and all vehicles. Finding substitutions for oil which is more environmentally friendly and issuing policies to impose high penalties on using extra cars would be more effective measures.
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You should expand on your ideas by providing clear, detailed examples and explanations that support your point of view. The essay needs more content to sufficiently develop the argument.
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To improve coherence, ensure a logical flow of ideas throughout your essay by establishing clear links between your main points. You can do this by using a range of linking words and cohesive devices effectively.
coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a more detailed introduction and conclusion. Introduce the topic and your opinion more clearly, and conclude with a summary of your key points and a strong final thought on the subject.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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